Hey all,

 I've been working on this for about two weeks and I can't seem to get it to flow right. Anyway I'm hoping you guys would give me some input. I'd appreciate it. Thanks.

Ps: this is a rough draft. I typed it up on my kindle enjoy!

One hand clenched around her bow the other on the strap of her quiver, she had no idea where to go. Her heart started to ache as she glances around at the city that was once her home, now burns. Screams and shouts echo through the smoke filled streets. She ran throughout the city looking for her brothers and sisters, but they were no where to be found. The smoke slowly began to choke her.She fought back tears. The flames seemed like a monster growing bigger and bigger, consuming everything it sees. She felt petrified as that thing came closer and closer, reduced building after building to rubble, she tried to turn and run but her legs won't move. That thing was demolishing the building right in front of her, she tried to jump out of the way but her legs won't move. She looked up in time to see the building falling towards her, she knew she couldn't move but thought she would tried one more time to move. And to her surprise she she did. She jumped just enough for the building missed her. " I've got to get out of here." She says to herself as she gets to her feet, and picks up her bow. She looks around at her home one last time, goes to run but stops, she turns around facing the flames again," Whoever you are, whoever did this, I won't forget what you've done!!! " she cried " I'll never forget this!!!! "

Taylor's eyes shot open, as they adjusted to light she saw that she was sitting under the forest canopy. “ I'll never forget." she signed as she sat up against a tree, while pulling the bow and quiver into her lap. “ Never!"

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Comment by SonicFan on September 23, 2014 at 8:59am

"never know?" ever?

Comment by The Destroyer Of Worlds on September 23, 2014 at 6:45am

Thanks a lot -_-

Comment by Mother Hen on September 19, 2014 at 7:13pm

Sabrina thinks this AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Or maybe not. you'll never now.

Comment by SonicFan on September 15, 2014 at 3:29pm

no problem!

Comment by The Destroyer Of Worlds on September 15, 2014 at 10:32am

Thanks. I appreciate it 

Comment by SonicFan on September 15, 2014 at 10:01am

Well, spelling errors or not it's still good.

Comment by The Destroyer Of Worlds on September 15, 2014 at 9:54am

Good for her, bad for me.

Comment by SonicFan on September 13, 2014 at 3:22pm

I did not know that. Good for her!

Comment by The Destroyer Of Worlds on September 13, 2014 at 12:17pm

I didn't either, but Bladebear is a language arts teacher so she sees thing like that.

Comment by SonicFan on September 12, 2014 at 7:02pm

I did not see that...

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